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[IP] Re: Girl Scouts letter

My suggestions for your letter follow. Good for you for writing it. I would 
be annoyed too.
I hope my suggestions help. Best of luck in your quest to educate and inform.
dxed IDDM 9/92, pumping since 1/02

In a message dated 6/11/02 4:45:25 AM, email @ redacted writes:

<< (Insulin is the 
product in the body that breaks down the sugar that you eat) >>

Here, I would change sugar to carbohydrates or food. They might not realize 
carbs are converted into sugar in the body.

In a message dated 6/11/02 4:45:25 AM, email @ redacted writes:

<< What is an 11-year-old girl, who happens to have diabetes, and also 
to be about 5 pounds overweight, going to think when she starts doing this 
project? She's going to think the diabetes is her fault - AND IT'S NOT!!! 
Then, because Girl Scouts taught her that she's diabetic because she is 
overweight - she's possibly going to go on a starvation diet, to lose 
weight so that maybe she can also "lose" the diabetes - and going to make 
herself VERY SICK - because Girl Scouts taught her it's her fault she has 
the diabetes. >>

I would cut this part entirely. I think this is overly dramatic and not 
necessary and might even get your reader lost on what's really important. 
You've articulated very well up until this point that Type I diabetes is not 
your daughter's fault and offered resources for more information on the 
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